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People's Poetry

Post  thenextmonet on Sat May 31, 2008 10:07 pm

I know this isn't VFK related but i was hoping to get an opinion or two on one of my recent poems Very Happy you can also try to guess what it's talking about or you can post your own poems for ppl to read, any comments are appreciated Smile

Swirling mass or water and sky,
blowing chaos through the streets.
Heavy water breaks the barrier,
rushing through the new escape.
Panic, running, climbing on roofs,
the cries of a city rock a nation.
The happiness flooded from this place,
into a bowl below the ground.
People were moved from ruined homes,
to a place they have never known.
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Post  PirateinBlack on Mon Jun 02, 2008 5:05 pm

Aww that's really nice! Well done (:

It's nice to know we have a creative streak of poetry within our forums Very Happy

Congrats cheers

xxo pirat
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Post  thenextmonet on Mon Jun 02, 2008 5:35 pm

thx so much Very Happy i appreciate the feedback sunny
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Post  littleman4ever on Mon Jun 02, 2008 9:56 pm

Very awesome poem, my sister is also a poetry writer Smile!


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Post  thenextmonet on Mon Jun 02, 2008 10:53 pm

i might post some more later and ty again for the comments Very Happy
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